The lovely squirrel
feasting under the feeder
found many good seeds.

happiest girl
May '19

Snow falling at night
made many happy skiers
ski during the day.

The sultry winds blow
Through the beating of our hearts
On its breath, love’s ruins

Cake minus icing
Is nothing short of bread
My heart it desires

The moon tonight
Shines so bright
As it dims
Our love continues
For our hearts have their own eternal light

Positive Positive
May '19

Eluded by your embrace
Eluded by your touch
As my heart yearns..it is just lust

Positive Positive
May '19

Brown and quite mushy
It floats around in the bowl
An old Cocoa Puff

Uthoughtitwaspoop Uthoughtitwaspoop
May '19

Positive --
This thread is for Haiku.

happiest girl
May '19

Sorry, but I didn’t know art had regulations and rules. I will stay off your thread.

Positive Positive
May '19

@happiest girl It’s funny how you are so quick to criticize positives poem when you did the Haiku wrong yourself. It is supposed to be 5-7-5 not 4-7-4.

Bishop28 Bishop28
May '19

What happiest should have explained is that haiku poems have three lines where the first and last lines have exactly five syllables and the middle line has seven syllables.

Bishop 28 ---

Happiest girl's haiku does meet the 5-7-5 pattern

Clouds moving slowly
and darkness fills the sky Bang!
Rain comes down softly

Pink clouds float around.
The blue sky in the background.
Paisley skies abound

Guilty-Remnant Guilty-Remnant
May '19

I climb the mountain
And look down upon the clouds
I've risen above

Rob Durana Rob Durana
May '19

I think it can be 5-7-5, 4-7-4, and 3-4-3. I’ve seen different variations of Haiku, unless the information was inaccurate. I’m no Haiku expert. Just checking it out.

Guilty-Remnant Guilty-Remnant
May '19

a little while a moment of rest upon the wind and another woman shall bear me.

not nice happiestgirl

4catmom 4catmom
May '19

What's 'not nice' 4catmom?
The fact that your friend positive does not know what Haiku is?
Or that her daughter Bishop28 can't add syllables?

How is the statement "This thread is for Haiku" not nice?

So far, in less than a day there has been some beautiful Haiku on this thread!!

happiest girl
May '19

Robocalls annoy.
I wish I could make them stop.
They drive me crazy.


summerrain1 summerrain1
May '19

CBGB's beer glass brims
craft beer golden bliss
canned, bottled, God's beverage

LOL summerrain1 !!

Ring ring goes the phone
over and over again.
Threw phone out window.

happiest girl
May '19

Good, but you got it backwards, CBGB !!
It's 5-7-5.

happiest girl
May '19

It's raining outside
Raindrops glisten on green leaves
All is clean again.

summerrain1 summerrain1
May '19

It's raining again
I fear I may go insane
From lack of sunshine

3wbdwnj 3wbdwnj
May '19

Warm sunshine feels nice
Splashing waves feel cool on face
Summertime is here.

Forum questions asked
That cause people to argue
Can't we get along?

summerrain1 summerrain1
May '19

I got it, sorry 5 words 7 words 5 words

Gas Oil Rubber Metal Nerve
Gears Horsepower Accelerate Lean Left Lean Right
Leather Boots Roaring Exhaust Motorcycle

five syllables one
seven syllables line two
line three - five again

17 syllables in 1 line
17 syllables in 3 lines
17 syllables -- three lines, 5-7-5
17 syllables in vertical line
Less than 17 syllables in 3 lines -- short-long-short
At least 1 break -- never all lines as a run-on sentence***
Always present tense
Eliminate gerunds (ing)
Avoid self reference

Guilty-Remnant Guilty-Remnant
May '19

Most people argue that 17 syllables doesn’t always translate. That is why 17 syllables and under is acceptable. Brevity and consolidating words are essential. Haiku is an extremely minimalistic form of poetry.
I had a professor in college who taught business, politics and literature. He loved Haiku. He said it is the ultimate propaganda machine. Basically, slogans and fight songs.

just do it

over a billion served

have a Coke
… and a smile

Guilty-Remnant Guilty-Remnant
May '19

Snowflakes coming down
Children playing in the snow
Drinking hot cocoa

Sunlight beaming down
Children playing in brightness
Drinking lemonade.

happiest girl
May '19

Red, green, delicious
Ples, sauce, or just off the tree
Apples are so sweet

Fine yellow color
Can you find the hidden fruit?
Banana sweetness.

happiest girl
May '19

Early morning walk
Tucked between two pine branches
A sleeping raccoon

Guilty-Remnant Guilty-Remnant
May '19

Cool crisp refreshing
Pink green seeds or seedless kinds
watermelon fresh

Hair blowing in wind
Sounds of waves crashing on shore
Sand between toes Oh!

Violets are wet
Please stop raining some time soon
Everything is wet

Back to the Top | View all Forum Topics

Leave a Reply

To comment on this topic, fill out the form below. If you would like to comment directly to one person, you may click on the envelope next to the posters name if they provided their email.

Re: Haiku
Name (Required)
Email (Protected)
Add Photo (Optional)
By pressing Submit Comment, you are agreeing to the terms and conditions.