The lovely squirrel
feasting under the feeder
found many good seeds.
The sultry winds blow
Through the beating of our hearts
On its breath, love’s ruins
The moon tonight
Shines so bright
As it dims
Our love continues
For our hearts have their own eternal light
Eluded by your embrace
Eluded by your touch
As my heart yearns..it is just lust
This thread is for Haiku.
Sorry, but I didn’t know art had regulations and rules. I will stay off your thread.
@happiest girl It’s funny how you are so quick to criticize positives poem when you did the Haiku wrong yourself. It is supposed to be 5-7-5 not 4-7-4.
What happiest should have explained is that haiku poems have three lines where the first and last lines have exactly five syllables and the middle line has seven syllables.
Pink clouds float around.
The blue sky in the background.
Paisley skies abound
I think it can be 5-7-5, 4-7-4, and 3-4-3. I’ve seen different variations of Haiku, unless the information was inaccurate. I’m no Haiku expert. Just checking it out.
What's 'not nice' 4catmom?
The fact that your friend positive does not know what Haiku is?
Or that her daughter Bishop28 can't add syllables?
How is the statement "This thread is for Haiku" not nice?
So far, in less than a day there has been some beautiful Haiku on this thread!!
LOL summerrain1 !!
Ring ring goes the phone
over and over again.
Threw phone out window.
Good, but you got it backwards, CBGB !!
I got it, sorry 5 words 7 words 5 words
Gas Oil Rubber Metal Nerve
Gears Horsepower Accelerate Lean Left Lean Right
Leather Boots Roaring Exhaust Motorcycle
17 syllables in 1 line
17 syllables in 3 lines
17 syllables -- three lines, 5-7-5
17 syllables in vertical line
Less than 17 syllables in 3 lines -- short-long-short
At least 1 break -- never all lines as a run-on sentence***
Always present tense
Eliminate gerunds (ing)
Avoid self reference
Most people argue that 17 syllables doesn’t always translate. That is why 17 syllables and under is acceptable. Brevity and consolidating words are essential. Haiku is an extremely minimalistic form of poetry.
I had a professor in college who taught business, politics and literature. He loved Haiku. He said it is the ultimate propaganda machine. Basically, slogans and fight songs.
just do it
over a billion served
have a Coke
… and a smile
Sunlight beaming down
Children playing in brightness
Fine yellow color
Can you find the hidden fruit?
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